August 2, pretty day to play outside hang out with your friends. It wasn't pretty till shine almost die! He and his friends agree to go to the park, ride the bikes or play in the park.
They had to cross a busy street. They made it safely to the other side and they end up riding their bikes till they got thirsty. There was a problem the water found tents didn't work so he and his friends had to cross the busy street again.
The way back to the other side was going downhill. Shine started going fast he was so ahead of his friends. Shine forgot his bike didn't have brakes, his's friends scream but the shine was just so ahead he could not hear them. Halfway on the street is where the bike stop and shine got in shock he didn't move. But thank the lord the guy reacted fast and stop on time.
i feel sorry for him
ReplyDeletethis is good its very detailed but its to short it will be better if it was long
ReplyDeleteGood story, I like how you kinda got straight to the point, but you kinda need to work on your grammar and how to put your sentences together.
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