At calhoun middle school all the students were anxious for the pep rally and through
out the hallway students were nervous to perform in front of other people, others were excited.
As kids were waiting,there was a problem in the gym. One of the staff members had to break the bad news to all of the students. A voice came over the intercom “the pep rally has been cancelled due to problems in the gym.
Students stayed in silence, then filled the classroom filled with disappointment. Students were supposed to be in the pep rally but were relieved to not have to perform.
Others really didn't care because they didn't want to be in a hot gym with hundreds of kids. After a while, rumors started spreading some teachers had finally told the students that the pep rally was cancelled due to an ac problem. After that people went on with their day as if nothing ever happened and eventually the pep rally was rescheduled
I like how as I read it I could visualize the event. I also like how you did your transitons. But I don't like how you didn't add enough details into your story.
ReplyDeleteits very good but i dint like that in the end you dint put the ac sentence with wen you told us that the gym was cancelled also you dint give us much details
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